Radio Show Draft

First Draft of Radio Show Piece

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  1. Good work Brett! The audio is great. The writing is good, but I wonder if you don’t bury the lead. You say “That’s what I find so astounding” but you don’t really elaborate on it. What’s astounding? The sacrifices that the couples make? What are those sacrifices? Right now everything is a bit abstract. I’m guessing that you’re trying to protect people’s privacy, but you can talk about simple things (no opportunity for spontaneity, long hours on the phone, whatever). Where does your astonishment leave you? How does it make you change the way that you think your life, your roommates? Just some questions.

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